In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular
Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular?
What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?
Entertainment has become a global business now and producers focus to the content which has higher demand in public, one of them is crime. People, nowadays, have affinity towards crime novel and TV serises. The prime reason for it is suspense, which helps to get more attention from public. In this essay, I will describe why trend of watching and reading crime-related content have dramatically increased and what are the ramification of this trend.
Crime in entertainment industry is not new. If we retrospect the old crime novel’s popullarity, we would never imagine that crime novel are dates back to Romans. The suspense is served in crime entertain media is really alluring plethora of people. Byomkesh Bakshi, for instance, has got unprecedented public attention due to his crime novels which have unexpected ends it gives immense plasure to viewers. Moreover, in case of TV serieses sound and video effect make content more interesting. People literally cannot stop theirselves to watch such a interesting crime serise. Hence, advancement in technology and people’s eagerness helps crime TV shows and novel to be successfull.
I reckon, unprecedented popularity of crime entertainment is actually not positive development. there are many peiple who learn to commit crime by watching such a violent content. Although it provides great degree of entertainment, moral it gives to our subconscious mind is really devastating. A crime committed by a minor, for example when he was interogeted it revealed that he learned it from a crime serise on TV. It clearly indicates what we watch and read have immense effect on our behavior. Moreover, such crime serise are not regulated by the government body. So, producer creat the content which do not have any connection with reality. They can broadcast anything to get public attention and for profit. Hence, it is not at all a positive side of watching and reading crime related content.
In conclusion, crime shows have great ability to get public attention and coin money to its producers, but it does not have any moral advantage to public. So, crime shows should be release after close scrutiny.
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INTRO:
Entertainment has become a global business now and producers focus ON (delete 'the') content which has THE HIGHEST PUBLIC DEMAND, one of WHICH is crime. Nowadays, PEOPLE have AN affinity towards crime novelS and TV serIes. The prime reason for THIS (delete 'it') is ITS suspense, which helps to get more attention from THE public. In this essay, I will describe why THE trend of watching and reading crime-related content have dramatically increased and what are the ramification of this trend.
B1:
Crime STORIES in THE entertainment industry is not new. IN retrospect, LOOKING AT the old crime novel’s popularity, we would never imagine that crime novel ACTUALLY date back to THE Romans. The suspense THAT is served in crime entertain media is really alluring TO A plethora of people. Byomkesh Bakshi, for instance, has got unprecedented public attention BECAUSE OF his crime novels which have unexpected endINGS WHICH give immense plEasure to HIS viewers. Moreover, in THE case of TV serieses sound and video effectS make THE content more interesting. People literally cannot stop THEMSELVES FROM watchING such (delete 'a') interesting crime SERIES. Hence, advancementS in technology and PEOPLES' (this is plural possessive) eagerness helps crime TV shows and novels to be successful.
B2:
I reckon .. (Too informal!), I, HOWEVER, BELIEVE THAT THE unprecedented popularity of crime entertainment is actually not A positive development. There are many peOple who learn HOW to commit crimeS by watching such (delete 'a') violent content. Although it provides A great degree of entertainment, moralLY it DESTROYS OUR our subconscious mind WHICH CAN BE really devastating. A crime committed by a minor, for example when he was INTERROGATED it revealed that he learned it from a crime serise on TV .. THROUGH INTERROGATION, IT MAY COME TO LIGHT THAT A MINOR COMMITTED A CRIME BECAUSE OF WHAT HE SAW ON TELEVISION. THIS clearly indicates THAT what we watch and read have immense effectS on our behavior. Moreover, such crime serise are not regulated by the government body. So, producerS creatE content which doES not have any connection with reality. They can broadcast anything to get public attention and for profit. Hence, it is not at all a positive side of watching and reading crime related content. .. WATCHING AND READING CRIME RELATED CONTENT IS NOT AT ALL A POSITIVE SIDE OF ENTERTAINMENT THESE DAYS.
CONC:
In conclusion, crime shows CAN REALLY get public attention and EARN A LOT OF money FOR its producers, but it does not have any moral advantage FOR THE public, AND THAT IS WHY crime shows should ONLY be releaseD after close scrutiny.
Advice:
1. Don't forget little words like articles (a, the), prepositions (on, in) and relative prounouns (which, that).
2. "Retrospect" is not a verb. Be careful!
3. Quite a lot of spelling mistakes. If you doing the computer exam, be careful about this.
4. Be careful about the subjects that you choose for your sentences. Check : "watching and reading crime related content ..." and "it may come to light ..."
Good effort!
TA: 6.0
G: 5.5 (too many simple errors)
V: 6.0
CC: 5.5-6.0
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Thanks for your submission ppatelronak!! Please see my rewrite below ...
INTRO:
Entertainment has become a global business now and producers focus ON (delete 'the') content which has THE HIGHEST PUBLIC DEMAND, one of WHICH is crime. Nowadays, PEOPLE have AN affinity towards crime novelS and TV serIes. The prime reason for THIS (delete 'it') is ITS suspense, which helps to get more attention from THE public. In this essay, I will describe why THE trend of watching and reading crime-related content have dramatically increased and what are the ramification of this trend.
B1:
Crime STORIES in THE entertainment industry is not new. IN retrospect, LOOKING AT the old crime novel’s popularity, we would never imagine that crime novel ACTUALLY date back to THE Romans. The suspense THAT is served in crime entertain media is really alluring TO A plethora of people. Byomkesh Bakshi, for instance, has got unprecedented public attention BECAUSE OF his crime novels which have unexpected endINGS WHICH give immense plEasure to HIS viewers. Moreover, in THE case of TV serieses sound and video effectS make THE content more interesting. People literally cannot stop THEMSELVES FROM watchING such (delete 'a') interesting crime SERIES. Hence, advancementS in technology and PEOPLES' (this is plural possessive) eagerness helps crime TV shows and novels to be successful.
B2:
I reckon .. (Too informal!), I, HOWEVER, BELIEVE THAT THE unprecedented popularity of crime entertainment is actually not A positive development. There are many peOple who learn HOW to commit crimeS by watching such (delete 'a') violent content. Although it provides A great degree of entertainment, moralLY it DESTROYS OUR our subconscious mind WHICH CAN BE really devastating. A crime committed by a minor, for example when he was INTERROGATED it revealed that he learned it from a crime serise on TV .. THROUGH INTERROGATION, IT MAY COME TO LIGHT THAT A MINOR COMMITTED A CRIME BECAUSE OF WHAT HE SAW ON TELEVISION. THIS clearly indicates THAT what we watch and read have immense effectS on our behavior. Moreover, such crime serise are not regulated by the government body. So, producerS creatE content which doES not have any connection with reality. They can broadcast anything to get public attention and for profit. Hence, it is not at all a positive side of watching and reading crime related content. .. WATCHING AND READING CRIME RELATED CONTENT IS NOT AT ALL A POSITIVE SIDE OF ENTERTAINMENT THESE DAYS.
CONC:
In conclusion, crime shows CAN REALLY get public attention and EARN A LOT OF money FOR its producers, but it does not have any moral advantage FOR THE public, AND THAT IS WHY crime shows should ONLY be releaseD after close scrutiny.
Advice:
1. Don't forget little words like articles (a, the), prepositions (on, in) and relative prounouns (which, that).
2. "Retrospect" is not a verb. Be careful!
3. Quite a lot of spelling mistakes. If you doing the computer exam, be careful about this.
4. Be careful about the subjects that you choose for your sentences. Check : "watching and reading crime related content ..." and "it may come to light ..."
Good effort!
TA: 6.0
G: 5.5 (too many simple errors)
V: 6.0
CC: 5.5-6.0
