IELTS writing practice for checking

[Md. Kabir Hossain]

IELTS 15 TEST 1 WRITING TASK 2.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is important for people.

Why moght this be the case?

Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Answer: (Coppied from hand written script)

Self authoritian resident or house bears significant than being under command of the owners in many parts of the world. It may be plus point or not, no matter; but the the variety of issues behind the factor exists; such as social prestiage, bearing unique identity and feeling of best security, and so on.

In many nations, social prestiage issue gets identical dimesion. Apart from that, royality absorbed in social prestiage. Authorotizing a home give social position, dignity and confident personality. However, its been very positive for some one but some time creates dilemma when they have to migrate from one place to another.

In the different area of the world, peoples feel better to carry their uniqueness of identity. In addition, some heroic and sublime nations finds ashamed of under command. They actually prioritize their inheridity and makes them different from other nations. That’s why renting homes are quite non valued for them. But in different angle, it is however clear that uniqueness make them inadaptable to other nations.

Security issues are the vital factors for all sorts of inhabitants. In fact, self dominated home is the best for feeling security. To be a caretaker of self property, it is very urgent staying in self resident. Besides, state and legal comfortness seeks permanent address. Whatever they get any benefit security, it is certainly undeniable that caring and maintaining a home is bit challenges.

All in all, the most expected thing is that everyone hopes to be a owner of a tidy home. Arranging and managing a home is tough but it provides hundreds benefits of living than renting one. Social, identical, financial and legal access in apeaceful resident however everyones’ dream; while renting home ensure the less formality indeed, its not actually bad. (294 words)




IELTS 15 TEST 1 WRITING TASK 1.


The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Answer: (Coppied from hand written script)

The chart given below represents the summary of the fondness of coffee and tea basis on the purchasing and consuming in five different urban areas in Australia. This trend is mainly documented through the common interest of local inhabitants in the last four weeks.

Overall, Melbourne city is in the apex position taking either coffee or tea while Adelaide is on the opposite corner in the same category. Fresh coffee is taken highly in Sydney but instant coffee mostly tasted in Hobort.

On the one hand, 43% of Sydney’s people go with fresh coffee where Brisbane is 10% less than the maximized city. The situation of Adelaide and Brisbane are very closer. Hobort uses instant coffee 10% more than that of Sydney.

On the other hand, the people of Melbourne and Hobort are nearer by using coffee or tea where as people of Adelaide are less interested to have such type of hot drinks. (154 words)

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Thanks for your submission Md. Kabir Hossain!! Please see my rewrite below ...

The chart given below GIVES A summary of HOW FOND AUSTRALIANS IN FIVE DIFFERENT URBAN AREAS ARE OF PURCHASING TEA AND COFFEE OVER the last four weeks. Overall, Melbourne City is in the apex position FOR taking BOTH coffee AND tea, (add comma) while Adelaide is IN the opposite corner FOR the same category.

On the one hand, 43% of THE people IN SYDNEY go with fresh coffee, (add comma) whereAS Brisbane is 10% less than the maximum city FOR THIS ELEMENT. IN COMPARISON, the situation IN Adelaide and Brisbane IS very CLOSE. A LOT OF fresh coffee is taken in Sydney, but instant coffee mostly DRUNK in HobART, WHICH uses ABOUT 10% MORE instant coffee than Sydney DOES.

IN SUMMARY, WHEN IT COMES TO THE NUMBERS, the people of Melbourne and HobArt are nearer FOR coffee AND tea USAGE, whereas (one word) THE people of Adelaide are less interested IN HAVING such hot TYPES OF drinks. (154 words)

Keep trying !!!!

ADVICE:
1. I changed the structure of the essay quite a lot. I made the introduction a little longer by adding the 'key trend' sentence. I also moved one sentence from the introduction to the second paragraph.
2. Some of the info in the introduction is repeated. Be careful!
3. Don't use an adverb with a comparative adjective - 'very close' NOT 'very closer'
4. I also changed some of your linking language to make it easier to read. 'in comparison', in summary'..

Band-score:
TA: 5.5
G: 5.5
V: 5.5
CC: 5.0

[Md. Kabir Hossain]

thanks a lot for checking.