Please evaluate my essay. Exam on MAY 13.

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Please evaluate my essay. Exam on MAY 13.

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Some people believe it is better for children to grow up in city while other say it is better to grow up in countryside. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.


For decades, people have been arguing that which place is most suitable for their children to live in and grow up, that is, city or countryside (e.g. Village). Some believe that cities are best places whereas other stands on opposite opinion- growing up in rural area. While living and growing up in both city and countryside have some benefits, I believe that metropolitan life has more advantages in comparison with living in marginal places.

People mention various factors as benefits of living and growing up in city. They believe that the best educational systems and organizations such as Universities are located in city, with having majority of distinguish scientists in them and thus providing excellent opportunity for their children to having best place to study. In addition, public say that by living in city, there will certainly be more accessibility to government officials and therefore they can esaily and directly tell them their concerns and/or problems. People think, meanwhile, most cities have a cutting-edge transportation systems and this can absolutely improves the quality of life of their children.

People living in rural area believe that the beneficial effects of countryside life is substantially higher than that of urban life for their kids. The main reason that they frequently mention is traffic congestion. There is no need to stick in traffic jam to be on your workplace. More importantly, rural places are certainly healthier than that of urban area. For example, as a result of lower traffic congestion as well as less companies/forms, there is neither polluted air to breath nor contaminated water to drink. Additionally, the effective and equal educational training are other key things that people consider as beneficial effects of rural life for their children.

Considering abovementioned reason and examples, it can be concluded that although living in either city or rural area have their own benefits, advantages of living in city outweigh living in countryside.
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Pojke66 wrote: Thu May 04, 2017 9:02 pm TOPIC:
Some people believe it is better for children to grow up in city while other say it is better to grow up in countryside. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.


For decades, people have been arguing about which place is most suitable for their children to grow up; the city or the countryside. Some believe that cities are best places, while others prefer to raise children in a more rural setting. While both places have some benefits, I believe that a metropolitan life has more advantages in comparison with living in rural places.

People mention various factors as benefits of living and growing up in a city. They believe that the best educational systems and organizations, such as universities, are located in cities, thus providing an excellent opportunity for their children to have the best place to study. In addition, people say that by living in a city, there is more accessibility to government officials and therefore they can esaily and directly tell them their concerns and/or problems. People think, meanwhile, most cities have cutting-edge transportation systems and this can absolutely improve the quality of life of their children.

People living in rural areas believe that the beneficial effects of country life is substantially higher than that of urban life for their kids. The main reason they frequently mention is traffic congestion. There is no need to be stuck in traffic jams to get to your workplace. More importantly, rural places are certainly healthier than urban areas. For example, as a result of lower traffic congestion, there is neither polluted air to breath nor contaminated water to drink. Additionally, the effective and equal educational training are other key things that people consider as beneficial effects of rural life for their children.(<--I don't understand this sentence.)

Considering the abovementioned reason and examples, it can be concluded that although living in either a city or rural area has its own benefits, the advantages of living in a city outweigh living in the countryside.
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