Please assess and correct this essay. Thx a million !

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Please assess and correct this essay. Thx a million !

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Re: Please assess and correct this essay. Thx a million !

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Hello!

This essay is quite good. you have presented good arguments with some development. Vocabulary and grammar are clear, despite some mistakes, and there is a good range of both. a range of connectives are used well.

If I had to make one suggestion, it would be to deal with the argument that many parents do not have time to do what you suggest (apparently!).

All the best,
David
wangyue6662010
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Re: Please assess and correct this essay. Thx a million !

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David.IELTS.Examiner wrote:Hello!

This essay is quite good. you have presented good arguments with some development. Vocabulary and grammar are clear, despite some mistakes, and there is a good range of both. a range of connectives are used well.

If I had to make one suggestion, it would be to deal with the argument that many parents do not have time to do what you suggest (apparently!).

All the best,
David

I am so grateful for your feedback!
Thx a million!



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