please correct my essay, task 1

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sami83
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please correct my essay, task 1

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The graph gives information about how many male and female Canadian students are graduated from Canada over the 15 years.
Having a glance at graph release although both groups passed a rising trend, always the number of women who finished their educations was higher than men.
Looking closely to the graph, it is seen that among of graduated women at the start of period was about 1000000, while this numbers for graduated men was only 700000 at that time. Then figures have been going up smoothly till 1995 for both groups. After that women experience a poor downward trend by 2000. Next starting to rise with a rapidly slope till 2005, reaching to the highest amount at the end of period. On the other hand male graduated after passing a fluctuated trend between 1998 from 2001, they began to grow gradually by 2007, reaching just under 100000.
All to all, it is seen that gap between female and male student have been reached the biggest rate at the end of period about50000.
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