Please evualte task 2 (general training)

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arsa818
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Please evualte task 2 (general training)

Post by arsa818 » Tue Mar 14, 2017 2:05 pm

Question : Employers sometime ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether single or married. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion




Answer: Recruitment is a challenging task for employers and some time they ask for personal information that could differentiate potential employees. It is argued by many the this information is useful, however, others think otherwise. In this essay i would analyze both argument and support former point of view.

The debate of sharing personal informational for job purpose is totally dependent on job titles, and sometime this information has no worth in the entire recruitment process. For example, it is useless to ask for hobbies form workers who will work in assembly line of production units. This information could not contribute in determining their performance. Therefore, people who think that this information should not be shared have very strong valid point.

On the other hand, personal information shared in interviews has many hidden clues that could attract employers attention. Due to this information recruiters can analyze the personality of the interviewee. For instance, if candidate claims that he is fond of capturing natural beauty through his painting, than this means that candidate has attitude towards creative designs job. Thus this small piece of information plays vital role in ascertaining the potential hidden talent of the applicant. Therefore, such data is considered as important information in job interviews and decision making to find right employee for high paid job.

To sum up, in my opinion personal information is very critical in selecting deserving applicant for specific jobs, however, sometime this information is useless in decision making to find the right candidate.

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Re: Please evualte task 2 (general training)

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner » Wed Mar 15, 2017 6:07 am

Hello!

Nice question!

Good introduction.

First main paragraph - A reasonable point, but is it always true ...

Second main paragraph - OK, but that's basically just the other side of the previous argument.

What about questions regarding family - Do you plan to have any children in the next five years? Do you have to take time off work to care for a sick parent?

I'm afraid, you've missed key aspects of the question and only examined hobbies.

Vocabulary is good, but not used to create a convincing argument.

Grammatical range is good, but accuracy is quite low.

So, overall, not bad, but could easily be improved.

All the best,
David

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Re: Please evualte task 2 (general training)

Post by Flick » Mon Mar 20, 2017 8:26 pm

arsa818 wrote:
Tue Mar 14, 2017 2:05 pm
Question : Employers sometime ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether single or married. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion




Answer: Recruitment is a challenging task for employers, and sometimes they ask for personal information in order to differentiate between potential employees. It is argued by many the this information is useful. However, others think otherwise. In this essay, I will analyze both arguments and support former point of view.

The debate about sharing personal informational for job purposes is totally dependent on job titles, and sometimes this information has no worth in the entire recruitment process. For example, it is useless to ask for hobbies from workers who will work in the assembly line of production units. This information could not contribute in determining their performance. Therefore, people who think that this information should not be shared have a very valid point.

On the other hand, personal information shared in interviews has many hidden clues that could attract an employer's attention. Due to this information, recruiters can analyze the personality of the interviewee. For instance, if a candidate claims that he is fond of capturing natural beauty through his painting, then this means that candidate might be suitable for creative design jobs. Thus this small piece of information plays a vital role in ascertaining the potential hidden talent of the applicant. Therefore, such data is considered as important information in job interviews when trying to find the right employee for a high paid job.

To sum up, in my opinion personal information is very critical in selecting a suitable applicant for specific jobs. However, sometimes this information is useless in decision making to find the right candidate.

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